2 thoughts on “Lose Now, Pay Later”

1. Headline:
   Something you did well on the head line it brings in the reader by making it seem like it’s a big deal by using words like “Taking over the world” and it stands out from the article.
   Something that you can work on is that the Healine slightly misleads the reader by not specifying about the slimmers.

   Images:
   What I liked about one of your photos is that it gives a clear view of the slimmer machine and the caption fits the picture.
   Something that you can work on is finding a photo that relates more to the article that doesn’t confuse the reader.

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2. Content:
   I liked how you kept the article on track and around the second paragraph started to engage the reader. The facts are correct, and you have enough information that the reader isn’t confused, but not too much that it gets boring. You started off great by stating facts and giving the reader information, then going into the interesting part.
   Something that I noticed is that the quote in the middle of the article is slight random, and you repeating the same thing at the end of the second paragraph. The facts slightly jump around in the beginning while you explain the Slimmers.

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