Hi Lucas,
Your mark: C
Ideas and concepts are provided but could have used better transitions. Landscape, and dialogue are appropriate for the scene. There are gaps in the narration, leaving the audience confused. More details were needed to help transition between plot points. The actions and dialogue reflect a satisfactory understanding of the characters, but more details could have been provided.
Your feedback mark: 3/4
Hi Lucas,
Your mark: C
Ideas and concepts are provided but could have used better transitions. Landscape, and dialogue are appropriate for the scene. There are gaps in the narration, leaving the audience confused. More details were needed to help transition between plot points. The actions and dialogue reflect a satisfactory understanding of the characters, but more details could have been provided.
Your feedback mark: 3/4